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Beneath Dark Clouds by ~ellylovesyou:iconellylovesyou:

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I didn't think it was possible
to loose everything in one day.

My heart, my soul, my feelings
they were idly tossed away.

You grabbed them and ripped them to shreads,
before heading towards the trash.

I just don't beleive it,
did you ever think we'd last?



I think of the times we had,
the first time that we met.

I think of what you made me do,
things I'd rather forget.

I tore up someone elses heart,
just to appease you hunger.

And, now, I stand alone in this world.
Beneath dark clouds, and rolling thunder.

Y o u
        b r o k e
                     m e.
and, I doubt i'll ever get fixed.
©2005-2010 ~ellylovesyou
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Author's Comments

A poem I wrote a while back, obviously envolving a nasty ex. ;P

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~Poison-Darts Oct 8, 2005, 7:26:36 PM
I like it, I wish I could write. =/

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I do not exist, I am a figment of your imagination.
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~ellylovesyou Oct 9, 2005, 7:13:26 AM
Thanks! :) I bet you can x3

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NEW DA

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*CrazyMoogleGirl Oct 7, 2005, 9:32:46 PM
Nice, format, spelling, grammer, all great. But the mood, Tsk tsk. It's to sad, I'm so used to the happy hyper esa, this just doesn't fit. *huggles* Love ya

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"It's never a good sign if your Professor has to stop and stare at an example dumbfounded, and then expects you to do it on an exam...correctly."

First rule of a physicist: "Why wait until the last minute, when you can wait until the last second?!"
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~ellylovesyou Oct 8, 2005, 1:53:22 PM
Lol :( Thank you :heart: ive always got a smile usually, depressed/sad or not. ;P So yes, my poems can get confusing mood wise

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~uselessflowers Oct 7, 2005, 4:36:21 PM
lovely :) Flows nicely and I can relate (though that part's sad, lol) :hug:

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The greatest thing you'll ever learn is just to love and be loved in return.
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~ellylovesyou Oct 7, 2005, 6:16:31 PM
:hug: Thank you luff. :) :heart:

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~uselessflowers Oct 7, 2005, 6:17:06 PM
muchly welcome :hug: :)

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The greatest thing you'll ever learn is just to love and be loved in return.
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*CCG Oct 7, 2005, 3:00:06 PM
aww, sad =( :cling: *throws a rock at the ex* You hurt meh love D=

You have good grammar and spelling though =) You should write even more stoof :D

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Hope Springs Eternal...~Lunar-Club:diny:
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~ellylovesyou Oct 7, 2005, 3:09:02 PM
Thank you luff! *helps throw rocks at anyone thats hurt you in the luff department.* ;0 ^^ Eh, I try to write but someones I have brain blockage. x.x

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*Shroomyfro Oct 7, 2005, 10:07:27 PM
*throws large pointy boulders at ex* It's good writting, but I much rather you not had the experiance to write about.

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Can't think of anything to put down here at the moment.
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